Having had time to reflect on the audio recording of the crit, the overall feedback to the group and the personal feedback I realise that I did not present well partly because I was not happy with what I had brought to the table, mainly because I knew I had not included work I had done and crucial information, but also following on from such a tremendous presentation, is a hard act to step up to.
I realised too late that some of the research and information I have done was not shown in any form, and other design elements such as sustainability I have not mentioned to you in previous tutorials, although they are shown in my sketch work. Having said that, I will now focus on a radical rethink of the design process and how to spatialise that.
I have gone over all my notes from previous tutorials and have drawn up a list of what I believe is missing. I have a clearly understanding of the views that are required but I think in the first instance I will sketch these until the content and intent is realised, after which I can turn them into collage/models and finish in the world fair colour aesthetic.
I will do the analysis and drawing of the journeys, and had thought to also link this with last semester when I had intended to do a timeline of the modes of transport used to access Coney Island. Transport had a significant impact on the Island activity and its prosperity and decline, so that would reinforce the element of creating a new form of transport.
I will do the outstanding items which we have discussed a number of times, which I haven’t done, however, there are a couple of points which I still feel unclear on and would like to discuss these with you on Tuesday, as too the overall list of work which I feel I should do for submission. I would also like to discuss the overall scope of the portfolio and its delivery.
With reference to the drawing I did which wasn’t to a scale but gave the overview of Manhattan to Coney Island and the route, I think the scale is too large in terms of justifying the route selection. It is not believable, and cannot be because I don’t know the area well enough to embed in the context. I can do this in Manhattan and in Coney Island. Although I said that the route would take the commuters/tourists through different areas of architectural worth, which it does, it really is more about A to B and I thought the key elements to focus on and highlight in terms of view would be on Coney Island and in Manhattan itself. With this in mind, if I show the overall plan to ‘scale’ and the route shown from Manhattan to Coney Island how is possible to avoid the question of why the route goes that way along the intermediate section?
Or, is it enough to say that the stretch between leaving shore of Manhattan to arriving at the shore of Coney Island is the intermediate journey needed to get to the points of interest, if it shows up incredible views along the way (which it would) that is a bonus. Just like the High Line with the Drag Queen performance and the exhibitionists, they weren’t envisaged as part of the design.
This is an Archizoom image which I thought was pretty good in terms of the view it provides of activity, something perhaps I will try to gain with the prototype hub/assembly line.
Below are a couple of quick sketches, one of the architect in his studio pod overseeing a section of the build being craned in, with materials being brought along the roller coaster and then the track rising up behind the existing building. Its not quite there in terms of what I want to show but one which I thought would embrace that element of the process.
The bottom sketch is more about the tourist/commuter travelling along the route and attention being drawn to the detailed facade on the right, which could be Coade Stone Panels and Frieze. This would be a material which could be touched on in another view as a key innovative feature which is to be replicated on the facade of the new build, or a form of cladding. I think I would prefer for the pod to be at an angle coming down from the high left of the image, but again this is something I need to work into.
The radical focus on technology and the design process will be resolved for Tuesday so I can be clear on what views are best to develop. I will develop these as mentioned previously like the 3d collage, then as you say, work up in photoshop for colour and the final edit before printing at A3. However, there will need to be other sheets which will tell the narrative, background and the Technology side of things for submission. I don’t feel that these should be in world fair aesthetic, but then I’m not sure how that would then sit.
I had thought and have sketched up the key views would sit within the physical portfolio as framed sheets which would lift out of a framework, the remaining sheets and narrative would be in an A4 booklet/catalogue with some pages opening out to A3. However , these are things I would like to clarify on Tuesday so I have a clear focus for the Easter Break and maximize productivity.
Thank you for the feedback, and words of wisdom, very helpful, as always.
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